My First Life Line
I was quite intrigued by the essay, especially since it combined with a TED Talk that we had watched in art. I believe that after reading this essay the author's focused purpose, was on the fact that help does not always come from the nicest perspective. However, even though it was apparent that other students dreaded the brutal honesty of this teacher. The author received the most help on to become a better writer. This teacher wasn't cold down to the core, otherwise the author would never had made a big deal about how someone had finally helped him, taken a chance on his ability to write after six years already in school. These prior details helped contribute to what I believe was the author's purpose. I would like to say that another major statement that I found was the overall overjoy of the author, that creativity was finally something he could use.
The author's purpose was to present her ideas of and approach to religion. The author was not trying to persuade the audience one way or another, she was simply stating how she felt, what she believed, and why she believed what that. She started by presenting the problem: deciding on a faith with her doubting mind. She proceeded to give examples of her search through different churches to find a fit. The author also presented morals that are stretch across faiths, and ended by admitting she didn't know all the answers. Overall, the piece had a feeling of open minded searching and was a picture into the author's mind.
I made a Powtoons account and read Essay Number 2 "My First Life Line"
I liked this essay a lot because of its relevance to myself in 8th grade. I was always happy to take long science notes because I knew that my strict but fair teacher Ms.Bernard would appreciate one more student helper to teach it to other and needed some students to take great notes, to do the labs and to lead the class.
I think the authors focused purpose was the idea that children have a desire to succeed academically but are unable to seize it without good feedback. This child's experience was clearly focused around the climax where he receives complements from the teacher. The overwhelming of emotion he feels and the way he communicates that is a clear sign that just a little smile and positive comment can go a long way to improving a child's self image in academic subjects all across the board.
I think teachers like this are what make students WANT to succeed. If a teacher is an "easy A" so to speak, then the students will not achieve their potential. If they are unyielding and unappeasable only the most dedicated student, who will try hard no matter what, will try past the minimum requirement. A teacher must have an understanding of quality, firmness of discipline and a keen eye for children who just need that extra push.
I read "My First Life Line." I could be completely off base, but I think the author's focused purpose was to show how much even a minor experience (in this case, an essay assignment from the 6th grade) can affect a person. He refers to the experience as his first "life line" and his teacher as his "rescuer" who "taught me to swim on my own." He describes the overwhelming confidence he feels after his teacher said she was "impressed." He ends his piece by recounting how good it felt to know that someone cared about him enough to take the time to work with and guide him. Just by investing an hour or two in the author, this teacher was able to give him a creative outlet that he can utilize for the rest of his life, and I think that's what the author was trying to express in this piece.
A Doubting, Questioning Mind
I feel as though the authors focus point is giving the reader an idea of her walk through different religions and how they affected her personally. In the beginning of the essay the author talks about how most her friends have adopted the religion of their parents and how she is yet to find one. Because she feels the need to accept a religion, she decides to visit and learn about all of the religions that she can. Each church she visits gives her a new and different view on what she calls god. This causes her to form her own philosophy and rules of how to live her life. In the end of the essay she talks about how her philosophy is still being adapted to with her growing age, and how she recognizes that her views may be wrong but is optimistic about the future.
I read "A Doubting, Questioning Mind"
I think that the author was trying to present her views and her attempt to find a solid religion, and how that affected her philosophy on life. She talked about how it was hard for her to find a religion, and how she tried many churches, and even though she learned something valuable from every one, there was no concrete match for her. Because of this, she formed her own philosophy on life, doing things in order please almost every form of God she had come to learn about. Each church presented her with different morals, and she took some of those to try to please herself and help her in her soon to be adult life.
A Doubting, Questioning Mind
1) She was explaining how she is her own person and how she is trying to find what she believes in most. I think she was trying to show how every religion has strong points and that people shouldn't be as closed minded when it comes to things like religion. This is what I think she was trying to communicate throughout the piece, making sure that everyone had an understanding of everything before judging it.
2) She talked about how she actually went out and explored other religions and also used a lot of quotes to back herself up in saying that it is hard to completely dedicate yourself to one belief. She took little bits and pieces of many of the religions she studied and used them in everyday life. Taking in each belief, she sculpted her own belief that (at that moment) she believed in strongly.
I read "A Doubting, Questioning Mind", the Author presented their approach to picking a religion, without pushing you toward one religion. The Supporting points were going from church to church and exploring each religion. She also presented a few morals that stretch across multiple religions even ones that don't exactly respect each other.
I read "A Doubting, Questioning Mind"
The author's focused purpose was to express how she felt about religion. She expresses her doubtful mind and her friends' religions.She describes some of the experiences she had when visiting churches and other religious chapels.She states toward the end that she has a simple faith and a hope. She states other examples and at the end states that she might be wrong, but that is what she believes at the age of 16, but doesn't think so. She probably doesn't think so because most 16 year olds don't feel they are wrong unless they are disproven.
I read "My First Life Line"
I think the author focused initially comparing schools to a prison. As I went through middle school I noticed the same transformation as they put Iron fences up and gates that could survive an explosion. But she talked about more how her teacher resembled a drill sergeant, and whipped kids. She talked about her strictness and the suspense of not meeting up to her standards. But how the reward of meeting those expectations, was more rewarding.
The essay I read was My Pal, Robert. I believe the main purpose of the essay was to show that we, as humans, judge others on their looks, behaviors, and so on. Even though those people might be the total opposite of what you initially thought. Main details that contributed to my thoughts of the purpose were that she menrtioned his clothing (filthy), his dirty face/teeth, and his sudden interest in her. She took him as being creepy while he might have been just trying to be polite by starting a conversation with her.
"A Doubting, Questioning Mind"
The author's purpose in "A Doubting, Questioning Mind" was to explain, in my opinion, as children we have to explore and question before you come to your answer. As we learn and discover, we piece together what makes sense because not thing will ever make perfect sense. The character learned about different religions by trying them; discovering that she didn't like one specifically, but ideas from different ones. She found by trying something new before, judging or deciding if she liked it or not. In the end she created her own version of mixed religions that she was happy with.
"My First Life Line"
The author's purpose in the personal memoir was showing how the smallest thing effect us and stick with us. We all expect something before we try it and find out later if we were wrong or right, most likely wrong. The child believes that he will do terribly and won't be liked by his teacher. In the end, he discovers that he was wrong and when he did well.
"My, Pal, Robert"
The author's purpose was showing how nothing is what it seems and you should never really expect anything(side note-although you should still be prepared for anything). Everyone reacts and feels differently, weather it is positive or negative. She reacted in a more negative way which the person who was attempting to be nice could have taken to affiance. Although if it was a different situation her reaction would have been appropriate.
In this essay, the author explains the way she feels about religion, the ways she explored it, and what she found and learned from it. She finds that many of her friends are lead by their families religions, but she is still experimenting. She picks up philosophies while searching for a religion that fits her, and she feels the need to explore different religions as much as she can. She tries out as many ideas she can and learns a lot and feels like all of the religions she's tried have left a mark on her. She understands she's young and still will adopt new ideas as she grows up but still keeps a good attitude.
My First Life Line
I think that the authors focused purpose was to show that negative reinforcement can sometimes be good. An example of this from the essay would be the student fearing the teacher evaluating their paper. This seemed to make them try harder and this was shown when the paper was eventually evaluated.The student really worked at fixing what they had like the teacher had told them to and it ended up working out for the student.
Some of details in the essay that contributed to the authors purpose was the description of the teacher and how the class was taught and the background information that was given about the student.
I read My Pal, Robert.
I think the author was trying to say that we can easily become scared of other people if they fit a certain stereotype and jump to the worst possible scenario quickly. While they may ended the essay saying that they should have been more polite because he may have been kind, I do not entirely agree with that. I do not think it is safe to trust a drunken stranger you met late at night outside of a stadium, especially as a young woman. But she did say that Robert told her mother that he had been watching her, and that probably meant that he was making sure no one would hurt her while she was out there alone.
"My first life line"
The author's initial purpose in this essay was to inspire and motivate students to try their best at anything they do, and to achieve their goals. The overall message from this essay states that it is always good to learn from the mistakes you make. Correcting your mistakes by learning from the past, is ultimately the key to achieving a brighter path for the future and beyond. In the end, when the student receives positive feedback on his essay from his teacher, he is simply happy to have found that his writing style has improved overtime. The author was able to portray that when you take the time and dedicate yourself to put in your best effort, the hard work will pay off. It will open many doors for you in the long run and contribute to your future's success.
I read "A Doubting, Questioning Mind"
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The author's focused purpose was to find a religion that suited her comforts, while exploring all other religions to find one that fit. She also wanted to give unbiased feedback/reasons for each one, and explained how children are more adept to exploration (through religion, in this case), and adults are more compelled to "make the right choice."
Details in the essay that contributed to the author's purpose were evidence, quotes, and explanations. She also described her experiences from traveling/exploring different religions, and giving evidence/support to her reasoning.
I read "My Pal, Robert".
The author seemed to really be communicating a feeling; an atmosphere. It's a story that talks about being scared without being too direct. The bleakness of the writing reflects the state of mind that the author was in, and the purpose of the writing was to transmit that feeling through a specific narrative.
It's always hard for me to say how these things are accomplished; when I write the feelings translates itself without effort. But if I read this story again, the techniques are apparent. The writing is a little too clever for it's own good, and that tone helps underscore the way that the story is presented. Because the writing is very casual and "fun", it provides a contrast to the grossness of the situation, and allows the author to exaggerate without exaggeration (not dissimilar to an optical illusion).
Another tonal technique the author employs is tension. The author increases the tension through bleak descriptions. The entirety of the fourth and fifth paragraphs is simply descriptions of the settings and the feelings that they provoke. Without these paragraphs, the essay would have little purpose, and therefore cease to be compelling.
I too had also read My Pal, Robert.
I believe that the author wanted to connect to the audience in a way that would let them into one of her real world and slightly frightening experiences to come to the conclusion that even when faced with something as troubling as a disoriented drunk alone at night, to still keep in mind their humanity. I found that even after she was faced with a real world situation such as this one, she had still kept a brave face and reminded herself that he was still only human and while she still was internally "freaking out" she had still treated him with a smile and a reply as she would have any other stranger.
The title of the essay that I read was “I Am Evolution” The author's purpose was to present her belief of evolution and why she believes in it. The essay was not formed persuadably she was explaning what she believed and how easy it was for her to believe in it. As the essay progressed, she explained how she was a paleoanthropologist and had built a career on finding out where humans had come from. She says that from her work seeing has become believing and she has spent weeks on end searching the ground “one bucket of dirt at a time” for answers and has seen some.
I read "A Doubting, Questioning Mind"
The author's purpose in this essay is to show her thought process when it comes to thinking about religion. Because she has a doubting, questioning mind, she doesn't have the ability to blindly follow her parents' religion like the majority of her peers. Instead, she seeks to widen her horizons and to find the religion that makes the most sense to her, by visiting all different types of religious institutions.
She uses her own personal philosophy to guide her, a few key phrases that she's decided are good to use in everyday life, saying that while it supplements religion, it doesn't replace it. She has faith in whatever may be out there and takes comfort in he fact that whatever it is, it would probably be happy that she's searching for the truth.
I read "My First Life Line." I believe that the focus of the essay was to explore how minor experienes can change a person. The author describes the incredible confidence he experiences after his teacher portrayed her appreciation for his work/essay. He concludes this piece with nostalgia to the past and how it felt when someone cared about him enough to take the time to work on this with him. As a teacher, investing your time with an individual person can go a long way for both the student as well as the teacher. I believe this is the lesson his essay was portraying.
I read "My First Life Line" Essay 2
I really enjoyed this essay due to the fact I could connect with it so well, when I was in fifth grade I hated to read, in fact I couldn't read to save my life. When I entered fifth grade at a new school with a new teacher I felt my stress rise and my inability to speak even greater then before. But then I met my teacher who will forever stay in my heart, she was fun but struck, loving yet demanding, and she got be to love reading.
I believe what the author was trying to portray was the fact that you are never dumb, you are never as bad as you think your self to be. That even though you may doubt your self entirely and want to crawl into a little hole, the person that you didn't suspect would be the one to pull you out, brush you off and get you back into the world. This teacher was struck and hard to the core yet she showed the writer what they could hold and do. The smallest comment made him sore and keep flying high from her kind words.
I read the "My First Life Line" essay and I have to say that I personally really felt for her. As someone who is always self conscious of his work and strives for praise to it I relate completely that feeling she encountered when Mrs. Smith finally giving her praise as a sort of confirmation that their effort was not in vain. In a more tangible analysis of the paper I found that the writing style, deliberate or not, had a certain suspenseful air to it that really brought closure and a nice ending to his essay. As for the emotion portrayed throughout the essay, I really felt that the author was striving to get that confirmation received at the end, even before it was stated that was what the students wanted. I especially liked it when he compared himself to other famous writers for they did not have the "Mrs. Smith seal of approval" that was made out to be extremely coveted. Overall I felt this was a nice essay that clearly had a lot of passion put into it by the author.
I read "My First Life Line". I struck me that thinking of the bad things in your future causes you to have more fear. Like the teacher expecting 6th grade essays to be bad and she has to read all of them. She does read them and she was actually surprised at some of the essays and I though that really pointed out in this essay. I think the authors focus was to get the reader to understand that expecting the bad things in something only increases the fear in that situation. Some of the details that showed this was the fact that first she was anxious to read all of the stories. After reading them, she then was relaxed and happy and joyful.
I read "My First Life Line". What the author was trying to say or get across was that no matter what happens if you try and try again someday someone will notice your efforts. He had a tough time throughout the "first 6 years" of his education. But in those failures he had grown to be an admirable writer that even the harshest of critiques was in awe and amazed. Some details were just like the other kids who had always just done average work. They put an average amount of work into it and got an average grade. He failed and failed and worked his hardest and rose above all the average people and was then admired for doing what he did. So in reading this it just motivates the reader to get and and persist at something that they often have failed at or something they never got good at.
I read "My Pal, Robert" I think the actions that the author conveyed were very realistic to how many girls alone at night would act in that situation. I understand how the author would feel guilty for being blunt and seeming un-interested in Robert and what he was saying, but the fact is when you are approached late in the night by a man who is intoxicated you reserve the right to do what ever may be safest. In this case this was not engaging in a conversation. The authors ability to describe the encounter so clearly made it easy to insert your self in the idea of this situation. I think any reader would get extremely nervous while reading this essay, and they can feel a sense of relief when the mothers car arrived.
"A Doubting, Questioning Mind"
1) The author's purpose was to make us question a problem and take insight from others. As well as not to give into peer pressure. In this case, the problem was religion. She was questioning which religion did she want to follow, as it will completely change her choices and of course her life style. She has pondered between religions and took insight of what they practiced or did. In doing so she was able to leave with a new concept or an understanding of God and Man as well adding further reference to her philosophy. Through these visits she was able to understand the reasoning of fundamentalists, but she is still unable to accept it. She is unable to fall under peer pressure which most of us are incapable of doing.
2) Though she has pondered a lot about which religion to follow and has visited many churches to take insight, she can't or isn't trying to fall into peer pressure. She is looking for what is best suited for her, many of fail to do so and fall into the consequence. She knows she has to investigate carefully this can change her as a person completely either for the good or for the bad. This is seen throughout the reading as she still pondering of which religion to follow.
I read "My First Life Line" The young author, William, has lived his first six years of school in a struggle to find his way and really define who he really was. Until when he met his 6th grade teacher, Mrs.Smith, who helps him by providing motivation and structure. By the way he defines her, I can tell that he has a lot of respect for her, as well as intimidation. The essay tells us how he wants to impress Mrs. Smith and do well in her class. As she was grading papers and evaluating students he was ecstatic to hear her praise him for his improvement and following her direction. With the motivation that Mrs. Smith has provided William he was able to overcome obstacles that he has struggled with in the past.
My First Life Line
I think the main focus of the story is that mistakes can be beneficial and that if you keep trying and learning from your past mistakes you can improve at whatever you're trying accomplish. In the story, William fails and fails again, but after changing his mindset and trying and trying again to be better he finally reaches his goal.
I read "My First Life Line" the authors purpose in the essay was to give hope and motivate students to try to do their best at whatever they want to succeed on. This student has had a difficult time in all six years of his education. But the message that was given in this essay was that it doesnt matter if you make mistakes all the time because you can always learn from them which can give you the courage to keep on moving forward. In the essay the student ends up getting very good feedback on his essay, and suprises the teacher. I think the author is trying to tell us that anyones effort can be noticed if you believe in yourself.
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.